Media Misfires from Actual Press Materials

Here are some examples of what NOT to do in writing an advocacy document. High-flying rhetoric, misspellings, passive voice, jargon, pomposity—it’s all here, and the result will be ridicule, not policy change. Be sure you see what’s wrong—and don’t follow these examples.

A History of Advocacy, A Horizon of Opportunity

As the turnstile of history prepares to add another millennium to its count, all eyes are focused on the arena of educational leadership. Opportunity abounds in this arena because of the attention that has been building on educational leadership for more than a decade…

Overview of the EC/UNFPA initiative for reproductive health in Asia

Blangadesh—Meetings were organized with the EC Delegation, Marie Stopes and CARE Blangadesh. Taking into account the activities of various organizations and donors, it was recommended that the Initiative should give attention to delivery of a comprehensive package of RH services in urban under served areas and presentation of projects to the EC with third batch.

Racism conference must consider health rights

The litany of both historical and current racism and racial discrimination is a determining factor in the dropping health of racial and ethnic minorities in America. As a result of the iron curtains of institutional and structural racism, it’s suffering an ocean of agony, more illnesses and deaths must be addressed, along with access to health care and receiving poor quality health care services, especially the undisputed difficult case with women, young people and poor children.

Jargon, grammar, clichés, repetitions, just plain sludge:

As part of our presentation we presented an analysis of the Philadelphia media market.

We visited a family with a goat module for milk production (an activity of the agriculture component).

Case-study data collection will involve biannual key informant interviews with a defined set of activity implementers and partners.

By embracing the full-bodied reproductive health construct, we face a panoply of indicators and the responsibility of rendering them into a manageable and meaningful set.

Overall progress in women’s health was constrained by the absence of a holistic approach to health care for women and girls throughout the life cycle, exacerbated by a lack of gender-sensitive health research and technology and data disaggregated by sex and age and user.

All of these elements will come under a general overbrand identity that is focused and inclusive with brand architecture of hierarchy and co-branding requirements.

This was complemented by a concerted effort to identify opportunities to leverage the work through creative partnerships with other leadership initiatives.

This output area will focus on promoting better linkages between RHCS and the wider RH and HIV/AIDS prevention programmes and policies, in the context of, for example, the GFATM, PEPFAR, CGI and SWAps, PRSs, HSR, BS, CCA/UNDAF, CF, etc.

The integration of sexuality issues into health research and practice will remain limited if the “sexuality challenge” adheres only to the reproductive health paradigm.

The parent organization will have the cachet to attract the leaders who will have the credibility to catalyze impact on the commission’s behalf.

Across the region, women are undereducated and discouraged from working outside the home. Considered a liability, their parents work hard to arrange a mate for them.

A primarily Catholic nation of nine million, abortion is prohibited in almost all cases there.

More than 30 million people now work for poverty wages, of which many are immigrants.

Finally, while, in the Caribbean, their civil service status ensures principals and schools of stability, there are inadequate incentives and rewards for performance.

The linkages between harmful practices and the spread of the HIV/AIDS epidemic is increasingly viewed with great concern.

Donor support has dropped from historically supporting 41 percent of total supply costs (with 60% being supported by developing country governments themselves) to 30 percent of the approximately $657 million estimated needed in 2003.

The devastating spread of HIV/AIDS, in particular among the youth bulge has led to increasing demand for services and protection from STIs, including HIV, and unwanted pregnancy.

The coordinated effort of the diverse women’s leadership community has provided an opportunity to assess the leveraging of this underutilized infrastructure of existing institutions.